Illustration for helloimmred?s the league stories and a Correction

[Ted Mark]

The League
the Bloems

Greetings! I love to really imagine the fighters in these stories AND I love to see new installments in series I love.

helloimmred?s the league stories are brutal efforts to drive deep into the archetype of fighting and family conflicts.

Hoping to get him to write more I offer one of my collages I make to illustrate the tales for myself.

And I will add a corrected version of the tales first three paragraphs - he messed up the girls names pretty completely.

THEN go to his series and discover how GREAT The League stories are! [ I add the corrected paragraphs at the end, with a small critical note.

Rudrah





Dan Bloem
?37, Dan is the father of the family. He is a mid-weight athletic body type with brown wavy hair. He is clean-shaven and very handsome. He waves as he is introduced in his black biker-shorts. He's also wearing wrestling shoes and nothing else.?

Mark Bloem
?Mark is in the same outfit, and he is the middle child. He's a bit taller than his father at 5'11", with the same hair. He has braces and a few dimples still left on his face.?

Cathy and Jessika (Note Cathy and Jessika are misidentified in the beginning of the story, and Jessika is called Jennifer until her actual fight)

Cathy Bloem
?Even after 4 kids Cathy is close to having a six-pack.?

Jessika Bloem
?...one of the most pretty girls at her school, she is a freshman.

?Both the Bloem ladies have their mid-length blond hair tied in a short tight ponytail. They decided to be a bit frisky, and wear a matching spandex tube top and biker shorts. These outfit define their perky and firm C-cup breasts.?

Jen and Deb
Debbie Bloem

Jennifer Bloem
?the youngest?

Helen
?She's a 5'7" brunette with a petite body, but beautiful face.?


Corrected first 2 paragraphs - NO editing beyond swapping names

[original begins at http://www.hostboard.com/forums/pro-...ch-pt-1-a.html]
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League's first match

Fight. Our first fight on the league tonight pits Dan and Mark Bloem against Cathy and Jessica Bloem. The two youngest Bloems Debbie and Jennifer are sitting out in the audience along with friends and family of the Bloems'. Everyone is getting excited and ready for the fight. There is no animosity between the two teams, they just thought it would be fun to get in the ring as a family and fight it out. They know it will be hard-fought, but they're up for the challenge.

Let's meet the family as they are in the ring preparing for the fight. At 37, Dan is the father of the family. He is a mid-weight athletic body type with brown wavy hair. He is clean-shaven and very handsome. He waves as he is introduced in his black biker-shorts. He's also wearing wrestling shoes and nothing else. Mark is in the same outfit, and he is the middle child at 15. He's a bit taller than his father at 5'11", with the same hair. He has braces and a few dimples still left on his face. He's still concentrated on stretching as he is introduced.

Across the ring, we have the both beautiful blond ladies of the family. Cathy and Jessika are both very athletic girls. Even at the age of 36, and after 4 kids Cathy is close to having a six-pack. She is fighting with her first daughter Jessika, one of the most pretty girls at her school. At 14, she is a freshman. Both the Bloem ladies have their mid-length blond hair tied in a short tight ponytail. They decided to be a bit frisky, and wear a matching spandex tube top and biker shorts. These outfit define their perky and firm C-cup breasts. There are many school-mates of Mark and Jennifer here tonight, because they are both very popular and very well-liked in their school. Both he ladies wave as they are introduced.
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NOTE:

I love the way this tale increases in madness and brutality as it goes, gathering steam and ending in a wild murderous family melee.

My only comment is that I kind of wish that Dan, after beating his wife senseless, had bid his son Mark to come over to ruthlessly break his Mother?s neck - before going back his waking daughter to to crush Jessika?s skull with his hammering fists. Why? Because this would consummate the riptide of incest desires that this story springs from for both males.